Since my last poem was met with such mixed reviews (both good and bad). So in light of all the critiques, Nathan, I have tried to make some changes to my style. Let me know what you think.
Thoughts...
I thought of this while driving today.
Second version of an older poem. A number of edits, so I decided to post. Thoughts?
Sometimes love goes out of its way to hurt you.
Or maybe you just let it.
Read it if you are curious.
My final draft of this poem. Please let me know what you think, this may just be my favorite thing that I have written.
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Seriously, you can not possibly be better than me! I am the master of trickery! I'm so good, sometimes I even have a hard time believing myself...
By the request of my friend Andres, I have posted this poem for him to enjoy again.