erinheartspoems
Erin Murphy
14 years old
Member since Jun 01, 2010
Writes from , United States
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I really enjoyed this :) yes there is a hypocrite in everybody. But the first two lines "Fuck every person, who's a hypocrite" very heavy and placed in a very effective part in the poem :) you do have alot of talent, keep it up :)
Midnightsprayer, oh I don't think your starting and argument at all, in fact both you guys (midnightsprayer and potentialthreat) I agree with you. I definitely disagreed with some of my statements in this poem. Mostly just saying the hypocrites part because I know I've been a hypocrite and I know thi sfor a fact. But the chick I've got in mind.... She really just is one. Not once in a while, all the time. Anyways thank you sooo much, your comments mean so much to me and I love getting feed back that help me grow as a writer you know? Thanks again!!!!
Fuck every person
Who's a hypocrite
They're gonna burn in hell
The fire is already lit
Too late to say you're sorry
And excuses will do you no good
Saddest part of all
I'd save your soul if I could
these lines gave me chills :) overall I thought the poem was good, and this surprises me, because I often take disliking to poetry about god and religion (even though I have written some) but I enjoyed alot! I also love the second last stanza :D - goodness-
I liked this poem, even though in my own opinion, i think everyone shows a hypocritical side at one time, wether it was intentional and keep doing it or not. (not just talking about peoples fake virtues or religious beliefs. But public statements too.) anywho i'm not going to start an arguement, i disagree with a few lines in here but i still liked it. It's a "Nice" point of view and i liked how well it rhymed.
White walls,
Leaving me with the girl in my reflection,
Immense pity,
Aimed in my own direction
Starving lungs,
Finding release in every breathe,
Pained heart,
Fearing loneliness till death
Passion so fierce,
You put eternity to shame
The love pursuit,
Its a wild animal you'll never tame
These were my absolute favourite lines, I almost cried with happiness and sadness :') I think youre a great writrer with this as my proof, added to favourites!
WOW! I really really like this one! (this may sound like it's obvious but does "too be continued" mean there will be a second part to it?) I really like it! :) P.S. you mis spelt Throne in the beginning. But that's the only flaw, keep up the good work :)
I can so relate to the last one
Like this, quite a lot actually.
Reminds me of a song♥
