mikemartin_lfs
Michael Martin
25 years old
Member since Nov 28, 2008
Writes from Alexandria, United States
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~Fight for all of this?
Actually give it a shot?
No...if you're truly ready,
I suppose I should not.~
this was my favorite part :D
i like a lot, adding to my favorites.
I agree. You cant change the past so whats the point. great poem
this is very true
there is no what if
its what now
there is no if you
its if only
I keep thinking that too. I just kept thinking that life was always like "What if this or that should happen?" Well, I think that's true. "What now?" Is life always about, "What if?" Shouldn't if be about, "What now?" "What do you do now in life when you've failed so many times and can't do anything else? Well, anyway, pretty good piece, and just wanted to say that stuff though.
although there may be no 'what if' as you say. there shall always be "if only".
I see the contrast you talked about, but I don't know that many readers will pick up on it. I like it though now that I see it.
twill.
This is very good, a wonderful point to get across. I feel like the poem may have been stiffeled a bit to accomodate for the rhymes. The words you used were beautiful but flowery and almost excessive. I think the poem would be just as affective if half of the words were cut out and everything was straight to the point. Great write non the less.
twill.
thank you for sending this, I don't know if people ever really think of a solider not having someone to go home to