anon_amarth
Spencer H
20 years old
Member since Mar 12, 2009
Writes from Richmond, Canada
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Has written 13 comments.
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Ah. yes I can see where some would try to argue about this.. but pure honest faith assid, I found this to have alot of power/passion and it does have a very good message as far as im concernd, and one that i wish people could hear and understand. Religion and faith can be very good yes, but it really shouldnt be worshiped to such extreams. We need faith in ourselfs first and to be strong enuogh to take our responsabilities and own up to them on our own and not blame or ignor it for the sake of religion. dont nessasaraly forsake all religion but dnt give it a power that is beyond equality and empathy iether. and beleiving in yourself can be its own kind of religion so long as you live well. its all about us and our choices.. not that of our god.. and now im rambling.. lol sorry, this it not religious debates 101 so i will shush now..
lol well it certaintly isnt hard to see where you are tryn to take us with this one. I liked it. and I liked the format too.
I only have two slightly, but not really negitive things to say, I think one line hay have one little error ..."Because it just a marketing campaign" shouldnt that say "Becuase it's.."?
and the line "Beucase 'im just not that into'" bugs me a bit... I'm really not sure why thuogh becuase I do like it and it really does fit perfictly. Plus you did quote it as should be done since its a tittle of somone elses.. eh idk..quess im just wierd.
I love this!! I use to feel and think this way all the time! Great work!!!
Interesting. It's a little like you've taken moments out of time and expanded and reiterated them for paper. I think this poem was a little too long to have an especially strong impact, but the moments you describe are fairly universal; everyone has experienced a moment, a memory like this.
interesting. erratic... in a good way.
Kinda like... a conversation someone has inside their head.
Except this time it's on the outside.
Sorry, i'm not making much sense. I'm tired.
-B
Sigh. Relationships, no matter what kind, are difficult.
The above is a statement of the obvious.
Everyone is unsteady, I don't think you'll meet a single person who is 100% solid on anything. Ever.
Great write, as usual. I enjoyed how you stuck in some rhyming here and there, and the general flow of the piece worked well.
-B
Very nice, although I think quite the opposite, your poem is as I like full of passion, and what you believe
Damn.
It's hard to look at this one from a neutral point of view... becuase of, well, you know.
The anger portrayed in that created a very powerful image, and an equally powerful message.
The last two lines were my favourite =)
-B
Wow, I feel like the screen of my computer caught an angry fire with this one. I'll be sure not to get on your bad side!!
-Chicory
