anon_amarth
Spencer H
20 years old
Member since Mar 12, 2009
Writes from Richmond, Canada
Has read texts.
Has written 13 comments.
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Good work, as always.
It's getting kind of boring to write comments on your pieces...
I rarely ever have anything negative to say. =)
Just trust that the person you were writing about may have made the right choice. Not just for herself, but for you as well.
-B
kansas reference huh? nice lol. i liked the poem dude!
Great poem, I find we are all addicted to something no matter how small that somthing might be, I liked how you broke up the lines higher very clever.
I've struggled with the aspect of religion for the majority of my early teenaged years to even now.
Not only does this poem make it somewhat clearer to me, but it puts many things in perspective (again, for me.)
Incredibly powerful and well written. Although, "I march through the valley of the damned, knowing what awaits me on the other side. And I prepared for it." I think you're missing a word after the 'I' in the second sentence.
"Knowing you are going to lose,
makes losing
that much better. "
Now where have i heard that before?
That was a well written poem, as usual.
It seemed very.. dark. Slightly negative. It's all very well and good to not believe in religion,
but you must accept that some people do, and while you may think it's pointless, they don't.
I enjoyed how you ended the piece, it tied everything together quite nicely.
-B
Powerful, to be sure. Whenever speaking about a deep, ingrained belief, the passion there always lights up the piece and makes it especially appealing, and you are clearly passionate about this topic, and are good at communicating what you think lyrically. I agree with you to some extent (though I am a Christian myself) that religion has perpertrated many of the evils in this world, but bear in mind that atheism (under communist regimes, notably Mao and Stalin) has a lot to answer for also. However, having said that, I sympathise with what you're trying to say.
i really like this, but i'm a little confused on its meaning. help me out?
I quite enjoyed the imagery in this piece
-smiles- pale girls for the win.
i liked this a lot. very jittery and confused, which is something i really like in poetry. i liked the line about her white legs. pale girls are more attractive to me. nice write though!
Beautifully worded.
Captivating right from start to finish
-B