maryread525

Behind the moon

by maryread525, Feb 16 2006, 10:12 AM in children, death, first, missing, ocean, person, prose,

I know it's longer than a poem, but please read it and give feedback, this piece is very important to me.

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Jackson

missbow

Written Mar 29 2006, 09:10 AM

i love it

Bobadilla

dalurism

Written Feb 16 2006, 04:57 PM

"Then you land on the first patch of golden light, but instead of sinking (I know, I worried it would happen too) you can stand. You can walk on the water like a goddess. Only children can do this though because adults weigh too much." Aww this peice is so magical, and yet oh so tender in it's memories. I really loved this prose, and could actually see the essence of your being poured into it. Really Nice!. peace.

Jenkins

dubiouschrisj

Written Feb 16 2006, 10:23 AM

This is good prose. You should submit stuff like this to http://dubiousprofundity.com/