The Sky Was Grey
this was an exercise we did in writing class. our teacher got us to write about something and then write all the sentences in the opposite order, and see if it worked. Not sure if this does or not, but i'm posting anyway.
this was an exercise we did in writing class. our teacher got us to write about something and then write all the sentences in the opposite order, and see if it worked. Not sure if this does or not, but i'm posting anyway.
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I like the exercise. I think it makes anyhting small seem bigger, and something big cut into your gut. I wonder if it would be more effective if it were longer. But I definitely think it would be more effective if the original were not included.
I like this. You definitly did the exercise correctly.
If i am the teacher,i would give you the highest grade that i will give ever
I fucking LOVED this. Simple, but very good. I'm adding you to my favorites. Let's see what else you've got up your sleeve.
i like it both ways one way is sad and the backwards way is sad too but it seems like it is treated like an everyday thing. and it is, sadly.
This is a really interesting exercise, and your piece was very well written too.
When you put it backwards I thought that the third sentence sounded a little bit out of place. It sounded a bit strange to say "one girl" after you'd already said "the girl". Maybe if you changed it to "her" or something.
Like most of the others who commented I liked it backwards better. It draws you in more, I think.
backwards it sounds more... I don't know, mysterious. great write, loved it both ways (but especially backwards).
scarlethands
Your teacher should bow down before you! Great job!