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bittersweet
Written Feb 12 2008, 10:37 PM
I really liked that, how you described exactly how this boy makes you feel, about your dreams, and just the imagery was excellent!
Great Work, keep writing!
-Bittersweet
platonickitten
Written Feb 12 2008, 05:44 PM
wow! wowowowow! this is definitely a favourite, i'm not sure how to describe how much i liked it! very very imaginitive, gorgeous imagery - i do love a lot of imagery, it's the best way to describe how you feel. reading this poem made me feel like i was walking on a cloud or eating candifloss or something, it was so romantic and beautiful and full of emotion. i can't praise it enough! i loved the lines: "The stars sing me to sleep with the / lullaby you wrote for me and the sun plays /with my hair when you have to go away" - absoultely glorious.
liz xx
lashleytwill
Written Feb 12 2008, 05:18 PM
This is just plain beautiful. I love it! I know the feeling all too well...
brilliant write.
twill.
blackconverse
um.... wow. that was pretty amazing... i LOVE the part at the end about the sun burning your skin and the stars fading. but i dont know why... i think my favorite line was probably
"You're the lightning that exposes the tired leaves
on the trees in the middle of the stormiest nights,
when we should be sleeping too. "
it just kind of made me smile : ) so anyway. verrrrrry nice write!