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kaitlinbriana
Written Apr 12 2006, 05:46 PM
I really liked the repetitive endings on each stanza. Great job! :)
el_scripto
Written Mar 18 2006, 01:25 PM
Sweet. Some of the lines well out of rhythm, but who gives a care, it was an amazingly good poem. The meaning is what touches the heart, not the rhythm. Very nice, keep it up!
penaltychick42
Written Mar 10 2006, 02:02 PM
wow can u say poet? this is GREAT and soooo sweet..if i had a guy that wrote a poem like that for me he'd definitly be a keeper! keep the poetry coming its enjoyable to read ur work =)
twist_your_knife
Written Mar 09 2006, 07:39 PM
Wow I really liked it Its how every girl wants her bf to feel
thefixion
Written Feb 20 2006, 07:42 AM
And when I'm there, I'm not alone, My heart is but one thing shown, Your face the only one I've known, The most beautiful girl of my dreams. ^^perhaps another syllable in the second line.. other then that, its flowmatic.
thefixion
Written Feb 19 2006, 04:15 PM
I guess everyone has that image of feminine...or masculine..whichever..perfection.. not that its perfect i guess, but perfect for you.. I definiely feel this. At some points the flow fell off, but rarely. Well done.
ahshadowrai
Awww, I loved every word!, what a refreshing piece of work (sigh) "Baby, you're the greatest!" O_-- (wink)