Hyperbole and Poetic licensing may have taken hold in this poem. As a referendum I would like to apologize for anyone who was insulted by this piece of work. I respect religion, and I respect what it has done for the world. People have the right to choose whatever it is they wish to, so if you were offended, I once again offer my most sincere apologies.
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Very nice, although I think quite the opposite, your poem is as I like full of passion, and what you believe
I've struggled with the aspect of religion for the majority of my early teenaged years to even now.
Not only does this poem make it somewhat clearer to me, but it puts many things in perspective (again, for me.)
Incredibly powerful and well written. Although, "I march through the valley of the damned, knowing what awaits me on the other side. And I prepared for it." I think you're missing a word after the 'I' in the second sentence.
"Knowing you are going to lose,
makes losing
that much better. "
Now where have i heard that before?
That was a well written poem, as usual.
It seemed very.. dark. Slightly negative. It's all very well and good to not believe in religion,
but you must accept that some people do, and while you may think it's pointless, they don't.
I enjoyed how you ended the piece, it tied everything together quite nicely.
-B
Powerful, to be sure. Whenever speaking about a deep, ingrained belief, the passion there always lights up the piece and makes it especially appealing, and you are clearly passionate about this topic, and are good at communicating what you think lyrically. I agree with you to some extent (though I am a Christian myself) that religion has perpertrated many of the evils in this world, but bear in mind that atheism (under communist regimes, notably Mao and Stalin) has a lot to answer for also. However, having said that, I sympathise with what you're trying to say.
crimson76
Ah. yes I can see where some would try to argue about this.. but pure honest faith assid, I found this to have alot of power/passion and it does have a very good message as far as im concernd, and one that i wish people could hear and understand. Religion and faith can be very good yes, but it really shouldnt be worshiped to such extreams. We need faith in ourselfs first and to be strong enuogh to take our responsabilities and own up to them on our own and not blame or ignor it for the sake of religion. dont nessasaraly forsake all religion but dnt give it a power that is beyond equality and empathy iether. and beleiving in yourself can be its own kind of religion so long as you live well. its all about us and our choices.. not that of our god.. and now im rambling.. lol sorry, this it not religious debates 101 so i will shush now..