zarandesai

The Beach

by zarandesai, Feb 07 2010, 01:03 AM in beach, child, depression, inspirational,

A Poem I Wrote just recently. I'm new at this and i'm not sure if i'm good... This poem is loosely based on some problems I've been having. Please comment. I need all the criticism i can get!

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maryam_mantash

Written Mar 07 2010, 08:34 AM

i liked it, so meaningful and well written....keep it up

Istok

geode

Written Feb 07 2010, 09:21 AM

Many have more criticism than desired.

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thebleed

Written Feb 07 2010, 05:30 AM

this a very good poem keep on writing