chicory

You Already Do...

by chicory, Apr 09 2010, 11:36 PM in change, dreams, love, want,

How far would you go to change for someone you loved to make them stay? Sure, everyone says that they'd be nicer, lose weight or dye their hair... but to become the human impossible? Came up with this while driving home the other day. I like it.

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purplicious21

Written Jan 03 2011, 11:36 PM

This is quite impressive work. It really captures a sense of romance and just a general aspect of love. The theme was what captured me. I also thought that the grammatic structure it was written in was good, you had a way of making the lines fit into each other so great job incorporating your lines. Overall, it was remarkable.

Kindelberger

bradkin

Written Apr 25 2010, 03:43 PM

Freakin loved it. I was grabbed at "Light behind your teeth" and the ending -- the last 7 lines or so are amazing.

Gallardo

chiyan

Written Apr 13 2010, 11:43 PM

Symbolisms.......
I liked it and read it again and again....

Notman

smilecity

Written Apr 13 2010, 06:51 PM

Thanks for your comments!I really enjoyed this poem of yours!It's one of my favourites.