erinheartspoems

My World and Me.

by erinheartspoems, Jul 08 2010, 02:55 PM

I'm not a greta poet I get that but I really like this poem and hope you do too... if not... well if not then that stinx... comment plz! :)

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Ditchman

sojourner

Written Jul 15 2010, 10:53 PM

I did like your piece,it was a little fragmented, in time you will develope your own style, just keep writing

N

miki_luvs_poetry

Written Jul 11 2010, 07:52 PM

ok well when you say it like that you made me feel bad cuz now it seems like a super amazing poem if I know what you really meant and it really is deep and I'm glad you said that because now I can understand and I can see now that it really is from your heart Erin so sorry but I get it now and I can see that you really love it too which you should because if you can listen to the true meaning its amazing. Really.

Murphy

erinheartspoems

Written Jul 11 2010, 09:15 AM

Sorry if I'm being of hand here but I have never written a poem more heartfelt than this one. "The two-faced personalities that lay inside of me." is because when I'm with friends I'm social, funny, load, crazy, fun, happy and sometimes when I'm all alone I can become reserved and well basically a whole different person in all! Then "For understandment, you hold the key." is because if you want to get to know me you can you have the key but "Teh rest is up to me... for what you get and what you see." because I don't always let peopel know too much about me if I don't trust them but others get to know more and see more about me than anyone else ever has. I'd explain more but I'm tired X10000 haha :) I'll work on teh poem more though it doesn't flow well but I think that this poem could be a keeper!

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miki_luvs_poetry

Written Jul 11 2010, 08:32 AM

Didn't really connect with it and it didn't sound like it was from your heart, but not bad, just not very flowing together

Kumar

rakesh_k82

Written Jul 09 2010, 12:45 PM

it was nicely written but i think personaly that needs more attention ....
with regards
rakesh

Rivett

lespaul4

Written Jul 09 2010, 12:13 AM

i dunno its good i just feel its just one bleak sounding line after another i mean if thats what you were going for you hit the nail on the head, but people just are WAY to sad these days.