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My favorite line is the last one but yeah plz comment cuz it needs work and I was hoping you guys could help me with it!

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miki_luvs_poetry

Written Sep 09 2010, 07:49 PM

The ending was like reeeeaaallly good but it didn't really connect with the beginning, I mean I know it did but Idk it just didnt really feel like a whole poem to me. But still good :)

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misswilsonclarie

Written Aug 24 2010, 12:49 PM

I liked the idea of how you built up the picture within the poem. There's a poet I found a book of, her name is Doris Mary Alford. I don't think she was a really famous but if you can get hold of her collection called The Snow Upon the Hearth, I think her writing is similar and may give you some inspiration.